Standing at the edge of the world
The waves flowing over the side
Into impending nothingness.
Take one last breath.
We sailed away from the shoreline
Raised the anchor
Strove forth like valiant youth we were
And funny now how we are knocking on heaven's door.
Before the sail breaks!
“The current's too strong” the first mate yelled.
“Service the anchor!
We've all paid our price lads
And God is our captain.
Change your direction.”
His beard was drenched with water
He grabbed me and yelled, spitting in my face with such vigor.
“We'll part the sea.”
The mast fell
“Don't come with me”
Thunder made a nice soundtrack
His words went on deaf ears with the noise
Lightning struck the bow
He was dead.
Abandon All Ships.
This is the time to die.
And we will jump to our deaths.
Looking at what we built
As it goes over the sides into oblivion
Perdition reigns from the sky
The currents strong.
So I bid you adieu.
Service the anchor
Abandon all ships.
So this is heavily heavily based on a song called "Take One Last Breath" by Abandon All Ships. I love this band, they use a lot of pop electro elements, auto tuned harmony vocals with classic hardcore elements its pretty cool. This poem uses a lot of the language from their song but also provides description and a mini-story to the whole thing. Hopefully you'll get what I mean if you listen to the song (which I will link below). Its supposed to be raw passion, super serious, as if you were immediately facing death in the most dramatic way possible. Good stuff.
Song (With Lyrics): http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Phuvixzybb8